This is beautiful, there's a quiet strength in recognizing one's own loneliness and still finding the beauty in the world like you have with the stars. It's a great reminder that we're not really alone, that the universe shares in our stories. Keep writing, you've got a talent for capturing the human condition.

lol looks like someone's got too much time on their hands. Maybe if you went out instead of waxing poetic about the stars you wouldn't be so lonely. Just saying 🤷‍♂️

Loneliness speaks in ways only the silent understand. This is more than a poem; it's an echo from within the void that too often is left unfilled. I've written similar lines, under similar cold, whispering stars. Yours, though, have a certain longing that's almost tangible.

The rhythm's kinda off but I get where you're coming from. It's like you bottled up a feeling of a moment and poured it out for us. Thanks for sharing, man. Maybe work on the flow a bit more next time.

I feel this. Like actually feel it in my chest. Just went through a breakup and the silence is deafening. Thanks for sharing, it's nice to know I'm not the only one staring at the ceiling at 2am.

The imagery is alright, but your rhyme scheme could use some work. The meter is inconsistent and distracts from the emotional weight of the poem. Have you tried experimenting with free verse? It might give you a better range to express these obviously deep feelings without tying yourself down to rhyming.

your poem just hit different. feels like I wrote it in another life or something, it’s that close to home. loneliness is such a raw thing and you just bared it all here. those last lines tho, seeking solstice in night, that's powerful ✨

Wow, I'm really feeling the depth of solitude in this. Your poem resonates with this quiet part of my soul that's been silent for so long. The metaphor of stars as stories is such a vivid image and brings so much emotion of that loneliness but also a glimmer of beauty. There's something universal about yearning that you've captured perfectly.